this is a first draft of a new poem.
i've sent it to my workgroup to see if
anyone has any comments or crits.
i thought i'd post it here and let you see
what, if any c&c i receive and if i change
this piece drastically or in a small way if at all.
here it is:
2 halves = 1 whole
you were big
your bigness
surprised me.
i saw it on my face
making an O
in your eyes
surprised
then you became
me and i
became you as
we came
together.
you were gentle
your gentleness
soothed me.
i saw it in your face
making you LOOK
and my eyes
misted
then i became
you and me
and you grew in
my womb
like a child kicking
and i loved you
because it was like
giving birth
to myself.
Wednesday, August 23, 2006
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